I loved this piece. The grammar was great the readability was incredible as a result. I also liked the storyline it made me want to keep reading. You are an amazing writer. I am looking forward to reading the story as you post it and I have time.

I had a couple of things that I felt were unclear. One of them is a more trivial thing while the other could help the story improve when cleared up. I will start with the biggest part that was unclear, was the prologue in its entirety a dream? Also the more trivial thing, that could make some difference, were the animals riding with her or her parents.

Overall as I said I believe this has a lot of potential, looking forward to reading the rest.